ext_84769 ([identity profile] c-quinn.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] guanin 2009-06-07 10:12 pm (UTC)

What I love in this story is all the little moments you've included; the exchanges, the humor. They help ground it. And, since you've kept them in character, it makes it even more enjoyable.

“We did invent the language.”

“And we reinvented it. In a better form.”


That's just perfect.

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